Rough Cut 1

Feedback

1-

"The narrative is clear although the continuity of the piece could be improved regarding the shots switching between the female character being in and out of bed."

"Lovely vocal matching with the male character when he's hugging the female on the sofa."

"Nice time span playing guitar - love the sunset in the background."

"The cameraman can be seen in the reflection of the guitar."

"Nice framing."

"The jump cuts of the female walking do not work quite so well - add transitions."

"Lovely focus pull."

"Don't like the jump cuts when the female is going to pick up the letter."

"Appropriate material for the song."

"The meaning is apparent for the viewer."

"Good lip syncing."


2-

"Nice lighting  on the performance shots."

"Focus pull is effective on the shot with the whiskey bottle and the performance shot with the grass."

"One of the close ups of the artist is too dark."

"The lip syncing is good overall however a couple of shots were a tad off."


3-

"Really good overall, it looked professional."

"The lip syncing was off in a few shots."

"A few shots were a little dark, perhaps try to brighten them up a little bit."

"The reflection of the camera man is visible on a few performance shots."

"The storyline is clear, the audience knows what is going on."


4-

"Really well filmed."

"Good lip syncing."

"Good link between the lyrics and visuals."

"The shot of the stairs is too short."


5-

"Good framing."

"Interesting shots."

"Good lip syncing."

"Well thought out locations."

"Clear storyline."


6-

"Focus pull at 3minutes - so cool."

"Performance shots are really nice."

"Storyline shots need some effect or transitions as they are slightly dull."

"Some lip syncing shots need work regarding timing."

"Camera man can be seen in one of the artist shots."


7-

"Good focus pull."

"Good framing."

"Steady shots."

"Good lip syncing."


8-

"Good variety of shots."

"Good/fitting storyline."

"Costumes are well thought out and work well."

"Reflection of the cameraman can be seen."

"Lip syncing can be better."


9-

"The sunset looks good in the performance shots."

"Clear narrative."

"Good use of focus pull."

"Appropriate transitions."


10-

"Not too sure about the shot of the female walking out on the front drive however all the other shots are amazing."

"The focus pull was beautiful."

"Too dark on some shots at the beginning."

"Cut the shot before the camera moves."

"Reflection of the cameraman on the guitar needs to be removed."


11-

"Content and shots relevant to the music."

"Cuts work well with the music."

"Nice steady camera work."

"Nice focus pull."


12-

"The lip syncing was a little out sometimes as well as the guitar."

"The focus pull was really good."

"The narrative is really clear."

"I can see the reflection of the cameraman in the guitar."

"Narrative links well with the video."

"Good range of shots."

"Good lip syncing however it was slightly off at some points."


How we will improve:

One comment that came up several times was about the lip syncing and that it was out of time during some points; therefore we will have to adjust this for our second rough cut, if not that, then definitely our final cut, as it looks unprofessional. We will do this by adding or taking away small shots to make sure the lips are in time with the lyrics, or if this does not work, we will take out the shots that are necessary and replace them with a different performance shot or a narrative shot.

Another criticism that was used frequently was that the reflection/shadow of the camera man is visible on the guitar at one point. To improve this we will have to use another shot instead of the one we have at the moment as if we used the shot we have now, we would probably lose marks because of it.

Another piece of advice that was often mentioned was that the jump cut we have used in the scene where the female picks up the letter does not look very good. We will change this by adding in a transition; for example a cross fade, to make it run smoother and to fit in with the tune of the song.

The continuity of our piece was often brought up as many people thought that the order of some of the shots were confusing and didn't make much sense; for example the shots of the female on the sofa and when she walks out of the door. To change this, we will take out these two shots and replace them with shots that fit in with the narrative and that have relevance to the storyline and the song, as the ones we have at the moment do not link to the song that much.